17 May 2018 | invisibleunicornninja
Plot - I have no idea what happened. There are too many subplots and way too many characters. Its like the the writer had ADD (that is assuming that there was actually a writer). Nothing and no-one is developed. The people who made this were way more focused on sex scenes and scenes that feel like they should mean something but don't because they didn't spend any time setting anything up. I would've preferred a narrator that just states everyone's name and backstory as opposed to this. They probably should've picked one or two characters, and developed their conflict before having a dozen different conflicts with even more characters. The acting isn't very good, and I'm not sure that this even qualifies as storytelling. Not good storytelling at least.
Sound - The sound design is surprisingly bad. Most of the actors seem to be whispering their lines, and it doesn't help that the background music is mixed way louder than the voices. There are also a lot of bits where the audio awkwardly cuts out, and random shots where the sound is a few seconds off.
Editing - This show looks ok. There are a lot of bits earlier on where it feels like the camera should be on a tripod, but its moving a little bit. Nothing too bad or fantastic.
I am genuinely confused by all the positive feedback for this absolute mess. For anyone who says "its just a web series" or "it was their first try" I would like to point out that there are good web series. Also, every first draft is terrible. If you want a story to be good, you have to read it over, edit it, and actually put in a significant amount of effort. I wouldn't care about the technical problems if there was actually a story and not an obnoxious and boring conglomeration of subplots with no point. Nothing here is done well, and I have just lost 1:05:30 of my life (plus however long it took me to write this) that I will never get back.